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Off Topic Section => Fan Fiction and Fan Art => Topic started by: Rwar on June 03, 2006, 05:09:45 AM

Title: Song/Poem
Post by: Rwar on June 03, 2006, 05:09:45 AM
Right, I've started this song/poem, well, the basic start of a song, and I was wondering what everyone thought of it...
You can leave a comment if you want, it's not very good I know..
But here goes..


Would the sun shine brighter
If I wasn't around?
Could your voice seem louder
more profound?

Perhaps I'm not beautiful
in your eyes?
But why don't you come & save me
when you hear my cries?

With just one look
you could set the world on fire
There's so much in you
that I admire
Title: Re: Song/Poem
Post by: Hulo_uruk on June 04, 2006, 03:59:48 AM
That is very sweet :)I like it :)Very good! :)
Hulo_uruk
Title: Re: Song/Poem
Post by: Rwar on June 04, 2006, 05:39:55 AM
Thanks.

Personally, I think I could do better, I'm working on it anyway, to make it more original.